Chronicles of Athena Lee (20 page)

3.0 out of 5 stars
Decent but truncated.

By
A
dam Andrews
on February 26, 2016

This feels like an incomplete story. It's got a good beginning part, and a good ending part ... but it's like the author decided to skip all the boring bits in the middle and just jump straight from start to end. It might be better to think of it as an introduction to whatever comes next -- which I'm still going to read when it comes out.

5.0 out of 5 stars
Great first book!

By
J
. Hendricks
on March 6, 2016

Needs some work on editing, but I'm sure the author knows this. However, the story was really interesting! How crazy to be alone I space for 15 years in the middle of a battleship cemetery! The heroine really must be strong to live through and not be crazy! Can't wait for the next book!

4.0 out of 5 stars
Great story teller

By
S
cott
on March 8, 2016

This is a hard review to write. I really liked the authors writing and have read both this and the next book and am waiting for the next installment eagerly.
However I was really generous in calling it a book. Thirty one pages isn't a book. If I didn't have kindle unlimited I wouldn't have read it in the first place, even having read it and liking it I would never pay even 99 cents for a 31 page novelette much less the 2.99 price listed. This is more like a very very short serialized story.
To the author...
I think you have what it takes to tell a great story. Your story is very reminiscent of the Galaxy Unknown series by Thomas DePrima crossed with the Wandering Engineer series by Chris Hechtl both of whom are very successful to my mind indie authors in this genre. The difference is that they are writing 300 to 700 page books. Your first episode could easily have been fleshed out to books size of 200+ pages. Just treat the existing book as an outline. You have all these great stories that you didn't really tell other than to say it happened all through the main plot line. The same with the second book.
I have read the other reviews left and know that your getting others saying that it's good but needs to be fleshed out. Listen to us. We really want to read this story the way it could be. :)

Nice story

By
T
endo Kayiira
on March 11, 2016

It was a bit short, but good. It makes me want to read more of her adventures. I laughed at the naming of the military vessels.

ganz ok

Von
F
. Lüttgens
am 29. Februar 2016

Die Geschichte beginnt nicht schlecht aber 3€ für 31 Seiten?! zumal die Kurzgeschichte ja mehr ein Teaser ist für die folgende Serien
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"A lot of old-fashioned space opera action"

By
D
orene Johnson
on March 6, 2016

I read the first story of this adventure and wanted to see how the author advanced his story line. Editing is still an issue. Genders of some of the main characters is still up for grabs. I do hope this gets worked out. For a really short read, there is a lot of old-fashioned space opera action. The MC is a bit loose but developing more in-depth character. It is nice to see a smart fem in the main role. She does not sit around waiting for someone to rescue her, but uses her "smarts" to save herself. I want the author to make the next book longer as most of the action is run too fast.

Lots of fun!!!!

By
J
. Hendricks
on March 6, 2016

This is a great story! Can't wait for the next one! The story flows better in this book than it did the first. And the action was really good too!
Gotta say I love all of the 20th century pop culture references! A ship named Wang Chung! Lol too many to name but it would make for a great scavenger hunt, how many pop culture references can you find? And can you find the one related to Star Wars????? Great job!!!

4.0 out of 5 stars
Getting better

By
M
icah
on March 12, 2016

A vast improvement over the first book with a more even flow in writing and editing. The storyline and concepts are still great and getting better with this 2nd book. Look forward to the next one.

This book is a work of fiction, All of the characters, organizations, and events portrayed in this novel are either products of the author’s imagination or are used fictitiously. Sometimes both.

Copyright (c) 2016 T S Paul

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Cover designed by Michael T. Anderle

Editing by Diane Velasquez. Dorene Johnson, Jennifer Hendricks, Bree Buras, Jean Paul, Judith T Ney

Special thanks to Michael and to my wife Heather who keeps me grounded and to Merlin the Cat, we are his minions.